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The Year 1/2 students have been working on their writers notebook entry.

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The Big Spaceship by Eden Pham and Sophia Richards 5/6CJ

Alia was spoiled rotten. Her parents gave her everything she wanted, and so she was mean, vain, and brutal to other kids.She got cars, toys, expensive clothes and perfumes and spent 10 hours every day trying out new beauty treatments.

One day, for her 11th birthday, she got a spaceship. It was so big that it blocked out the sun. “Oh, thankyou, mummy!” She gushed. “I OMG love it!!” She rushed in, not caring how hard she slammed the door.

When inside, she pushed and jammed each button down. Some of them fell off. But she didn’t realise she pressed the TAKEOFF button. Alia knew nothing about spaceships and she could only watch in horror as the screen started the countdown. 3…2…1… blast off! The spaceship flew higher and higher, showing no sign of slowing. Soon, Alia was in space.

Then Alia spotted a book. Not just any book, but the manual to the buttons on the spaceship. “Ewww. A BOOK! Seriously. How am I going to get ou’ of ’tis beastly ’paceship! I guess I’m going to have to have a look at that beastly thing. I wish there were servants to boss! There would be, actually! Silly me!” She reluctantly flicked through the pages and found something interesting.

“Servants!” She demanded. “Press the emergency landing button!”

But, of course, all her servants were down on earth.

Unfortunately, the button was four metres away, which is a ridiculously long way to walk. Alia was having a very hard time. No servants, no cocktails, and certainly no spas.

She wondered what the time was. Surely it was time for lunch soon.

Unfortunately, Alia was too lazy to be taught how to read the time, so the analogue clock in the spacecraft was no use to her. She imagined a delicious platter of the world’s finest food waiting for her at the table.

It could not be held off any longer. She got up and walked a strenuous 10 steps, stretched her arm out, and pressed the emergency landing

button. And she could only frown as the spaceship began slowly floating down to earth. “Servants! She shrieked. “Make it go faster!”

Of course, she remembered there were no servants in the spaceship. So she had to wait three hours.

As soon as she reached the ground, she tried to fling open the door. But she forgot that the button to open the door had fallen off when she pressed it so hard. So she had to settle on kicking it.

But her 500,000 dollar designer heels weren’t hard enough. It resulted with a broken diamond on her right shoe. “Servants!” She screamed. “Mend this diamond with my finest silk thread NOW!!”

Then…“MUMMY! ’ADDY!” She bellowed. “Put that ’paceship in the dump NOW!”

“Of course, honey,” said her mother soothingly. “We will dispose of it immediately.”

After the spaceship had been thrown/lifted/pushed/towed away, they all sat down on velvet lined thrones, and ate a lunch of lobster, truffles, caviar and ridiculously overpriced cheese.

“This salmon is delicious,” remarked Alia.

“Oh, that’s so very wonderful of you darling, but I didn’t know that we got salmon!” said her mother.

“We didn’t,” explained her father. “We got caviar.”

“What’s caviar?” Asked Alia.

“Fish eggs,” replied her father.

“YUCK! Take all the ’aviar away! I’m never eating it again!”