Year 4 Show Don't Tell
Miss Daws
This week, we have been focusing on different techniques writers use to ‘show’ how a character is feeling. A character's feelings could be portrayed through action, description, questions or dialogue. As a class, we identified how we were currently feeling about lockdown and then used a technique to ‘show’ the reader that particular emotion through a sentence. Can you guess how we are feeling?
| Grace: a big smile on my face watching her blow out the candles and waiting for the cake to be cut. | Nicholas: I taste my fresh breath produced from my lung. I focus on my heartbeat. I take 10 breaths. I lay down the table and wish everything will be alright. | Thomas N: As I watched the lions thrash the kangaroos, not even that could make me forget about what happened today. | Luca: I lied in bed as my legs went to sleep and my body stuck. |
| Georgia: I slam the table, I can't do this anymore. I just need to get out of the house, being in lockdown, I can't do it. | Thomas N: Yawning every second trying to pick myself up. I fell on my bed and slept the rest of the night having nightmares about what COVID had done to this world. | Cleo: As I heard the sad corona news, my heart melted with sadness and tears were dripping down my face. | Dean: As I watched the outside world from the inside, I felt an emotion that was too strong to handle. I felt like I have been waiting a whole millennium just to see the world suffer just from this one THING! I wish I could go on the playground. Looking at you Australian Government. |
| Michael: My body filled with excitement as I had energy to play soccer | Hamish: I sat down with my parents who were watching the daily case report. I nervously listened to the news reports, "NOOOOO" I screamed when I heard 53 cases so far. | Ryan: As I heard Kylo wake up, my legs jumped out like burning fire and my arms swung like lighting | Annie: I stomped to my chair to finish my work. I couldn't stand being locked up in my house any more |
| Ethan: When I hit the bed I went straight to sleep. When I wake up I don't want to get up. | Christine: When I woke up I felt a dry throat and didn't want to go to the doctor | Thomas H: I was fighting my brother until he started to give up and go away | Freya: Log into my computer into a houseparty to finally see my friends to play. |
| Chris: He couldn’t sleep, he kept waking up again. He kept trying but he just couldn't sleep no matter how much he tried. | Joseph: I feel I like it because I get to have more game time but I also feel frustrated because I don't get to see my school friends. | Xavier: When the final siren went I screamed out loud, raised my arms above my head and jumped up and down. We did it, we won the grand final!!! |