Celebrating young writers
Our Year 6 students have continued to explore the art of poetry and are now also experimenting with writing techniques to bring their words to life.
Here are a selection of pieces, inspired by visual prompts in the classroom, as well as the students' own imagination. From powerful poems, personification in paragraphs and similes in sentences, our students are having fun playing with words.
Year 6 poetry
A surreal family holiday
– By Toma
Tranquil waves rising and falling like the sun on its daily journey.
The essence of a surreal family holiday,
Swerving in the air as I take the first step into the calming ocean.
Brotherhood's so strong I can taste it.
I'm at a loss for words as I hear the squawking of seagulls but it's not annoying, it's exhilarating.
The inconsolable man
– By Toma
He’s a cold and depressed man.
Nowhere to go, nothing to do.
He feels as if he’s got an abyss for a heart.
Cheerful sounds of life no more.
He feels nothing, he sees nothing, he is nothing.
Sadness so strong, you can smell it.
O, life is a waste, full of bitter taste and choices made in a haste.
Similes and personification
The Waves
- Written by Henry P
The thrashing waves crumbled on the shore like a cookie being stepped on. While the waves were hazardous, a little dog would yap as much as a mum on a picnic with friends. Then the waves died down like my grandma going to bed.
While the sky was vibrant and beautiful, the seaweed was as ugly as an ogre living in a swamp.
The Dusty Road
- Written by Henry P
The old dusty road begged for mercy as the harmful bikes drive all over it. As the night passed the wind whispered secrets and the trail sighed a relieved sigh. The trees surrounding the road protested for them to be set free. It was then time for the trail to fight back, and it shouted as loud as it could until it finally succeeded.
Fables
The Cat and the Bear
– Written by Lily D and Quincie C
On a warm sunny day in the woods, just before winter, a hungry bear was pacing beneath a tree. A cat strolled by, and seeing that the bear needed help, asked what was wrong.
‘Can you help me get that honey? I need it for my hibernation,’ asked the bear, pointing at the hive, which was way up at the top of the tree.
‘Okay,’ the cat agreed, and began making its way up the tree.
The cat got to the branch just before the hive and knocked it down to the bear. Then she realised that she was stuck. Her thin body was trapped between the two branches. The bear leapt into action, shaking the tree as hard as he could. The cat finally fell out of the tree, landing on the bear’s furry back.
In the end the bear got the honey just in time for his hibernation and the cat was safe, with the bear to protect her.
Moral: Kindness always pays off.
The Swans and the Mole
– Written by William K and Jun C
One hot day a mole was thirsty. It went to the local pond for a drink. There he met a group of young swans, diving into the water one by one for fish to eat. He walked along the edge of the pond looking for a safe place to drink so he wouldn’t fall in.
When he found a spot, he was about to start drinking when the group of swans called out “Hey why is a creature as ugly as you trying to drink from our pond you will ruin our water.”
“Well, I am just thirsty so I thought I would have a drink.”
“Well, guess what you can’t.”
“Why, I didn’t do anything to you.”
“Because you are hideous and hideous creatures aren’t welcome here so go away.”
The mole decided to wait behind a nearby tree for the swans to leave. Then out of nowhere a fisherman appeared and readied his net. The fisherman threw the net into the water, and it landed on the mean group of swans, but he didn’t notice and waited for the fish to get caught. The mole saw and immediately began to bite at the net to free the swans. The swans struggled and squawked in panic.
After they were free, they thanked the mole and apologised for calling him ugly they said he could have all the water he wanted.
Moral: Don’t judge others by their appearance.
Year 1 story retell
"Once upon a time, there was a girl named Rapunzel who lived in a tall tower with no door..." Our Year 1 students enjoyed retelling Rapunzel in their own words.
Rapunzel retell
- Written by Lily S
First a mean witch lived behind a tall wall. Behind the wall there was a beautiful garden. No one dared to climb the wall. But one day the queen was pregnant with a girl. But the queen wanted some Rapunzel. So the king climbed over the wall and got Rapunzel. But when he turned around the witch was standing right there. The mean witch said "I will let you have all the Rapunzel you'd like, but when the baby is born, you give it to me." The king said OK.
Finally when the princess was twelve the witch took the princess to a tall tower with no doors. The next day the mean witch said "Rapunzel, Rapunzel, let down your hair." So Rapunzel let down her hair. But one day a prince was riding his horse and heard Rapunzel singing. He wandered on. It was later he saw the witch and he knew how to get up. So the next day he called "Rapunzel, Rapunzel, let down your hair." So she let down her hair and he climbed up her hair and he saw how it was singing and he went the next day.
The witch cut off her hair. The next day the prince came, when he got up he got greeted by the witch and she threw him over. He got blinded, he called Rapunzel.
But one day Rapunzel found him and hugged him. Her tear hit his eye and he wasn't blind and they live happily ever after.
